Tolerance09

=Writing from Knowledge and Experience - Tolerance = After you have created a link to your page, please copy and paste your "Tolerance" essay onto your page. Return to this page. You will be peer-editing a Tolerance essay from someone at your table. To peer-edit, do the following making the corrections and suggestions on their page:  1. Is the thesis statement of the writing clear and in the Intro Paragraph? Yes _ __No__ _ If your answer is yes, underline the thesis statement.

If your answer is no, give a suggestion for a thesis statement.

2. Does each of the three body paragraphs have a topic sentence? Yes __No___ If your answer is yes, underline the topic sentences in each of the body paragraphs.

If your answer is no, give a suggestion for a topic sentence within the Wiki.

3. Is the topic sentence of each body paragraph supported by three important and relevant details, examples, and/or anecdotes? Yes _ No _ If your answer is yes, change the color of the text for each of the three supporting detail (for the three supporting paragraphs).

If your answer is no, what can the writer do to improve the supporting paragraphs.

4. Is the writing interesting with engaging words and different sentence lengths and types? Yes _ No _ If your answer is yes, give at least two examples to support your answer. Write these at the bottom of the essay.

If your answer is no, what can the writer do to improve his writing.

5. Does the concluding paragraph have a sentence that restates the thesis statement? Yes No _

If your answer is yes, underline it.

If your answer is no, what can the writer do to improve his conclusion? Make the change in the Wiki.

6. Underline any spelling errors that you find on the essay and change the font for any sentences that are run-ons, fragments, or just don’t sound right.

1st Hour
Scott Alwood Catheine Bailey Bryce Becerra McKenzie Burk Asia Covey Jalen Draper Lindsey Fisk Emmett Fraley James Frank Mariah Hicks Trent Homan Maddison Main Hannah Mitchell Sarah Morrill Cynthia Palmateer Christina Profit Sydney Slone Samuel Trescott Joshua Waychoff Mrs. Beattie

2nd Hour
Jesse Anderson Xitlali Barrera✰ Cheyanne Brown Devon DiGiacomo Susan Geiger Jessica Goras Mitchell Haviland Tyler Howard Brady Johnson Brittney Keller Jacob Maurer Jasmine McIntosh Katelyn McKinnon Wyatt Mead Martha Merchant Marissa Miller Tyler Ogden Kelci Tesch Justin Truckey 

5th Hour
Rath Barrios Sarah Boley Jordan Coffman Adam Dodge Olivia Edwards Dylan Elliott Allison Foster Seth Gibson Alayna Herman Joshua Holton Brooke Johnson William Langdon Kelsey LaVergne Shaun Mears Zackary Platschorre Todd Powell Christopher Rieger Dana Sebald-VanDoren Alexandria Sidelinker Kylie Walker Samantha Walling Ryan Wunder

6th Hour
Geordan Blowers Randall Cooley Brittany Duncan Katharine Eveleth Kelsee Gates Taylor Howard Tyler Kijac Nicholas Lepper Jakob Lewis Summer Little Alex Platschorre Alexa Rieger Devin Shepherd Crystal Smith Jessica Snyder Veronica Spoor Brittany Thorp Kaitlyn Turley Gunnar Waggener Krista Walker Kyler Woodard