Jacob+Maurer

__Tolerance has been abundant in my life, as in I use it a lot.__ I tolerate school on weekdays for about eight hours straight. Then when I get home and watch T.V. there are so many commercials, so annoying! But some of the most tolerance I need is when I am with my family. It may be abundant, but I hate using it.
 * 1) Tolerance

__As I have already said, school is something I tolerate, not like.__ School takes too much time out of my time at home, playing video games. There is way too much work in school, including homework, that is such a nuisance for getting sleep at night. But most of all the reasons I need to tolerate school, is I get sooooooooooo bored! Anyway, school is annoying, but I just tolerate it.

__You know all of the commercials on T.V. need to be tolerated also!__ If you are watching live T.V. and you see all of the commercials over and over in an infinite loop! Along with that, there are too many of them in one show, like 20 in a half hour show! They all are so stupid, and make no sense either! Tolerating T.V. commercials is a pain, but its possible.

__The other two reasons are a piece of cake, compared to tolerating family!__ Sometimes, I think that they make too many rules for me to follow, but are tolerant. My Siblings are EXTREMELY hard to tolerate because of how annoying they are! Along with that all of the other kids in the family most of the time whine too much! When tolerating family, life becomes way to annoying!

My tolerance levels have to be high for my regular life. As you all are, school is something I hate but have to go to, so I tolerate it. T.V. Commercials are a nuisence that have to be tolerated also! Most of all Family is the thing I have to tolerate the most! Abundance of tolerance is something I need for life, but its probably the same for you too!

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1. As I read, I noticed that it didn't really make sense to put "not like" at the end on the first paragraph's topic sentence. I wasn't sure if that was suppose to be there or not.

2. Then sentences have little vary. I think you should change it up. You added explanation points to a lot of the sentences. And when I was reading it, the sentence didn't need it. It wasn't that exciting. So I think that you should keep some of them but get rid of some too.