Nicholas+Lepper

__ I have tons of tolerance in people that I don’t even see every day...__ __On__ main thing that goes along with tolerance is __every day__ putting up with my friends. Then again there is my family they are another thing that I have to tolerate every day which can get annoying! Then when I am at school it never ends I still have to put up with teachers **__rather__** I like it or not... That is why I am here to tell you my story about tolerance in all these people and things to evolve them. __ Most important thing in the world to me would probably have to be my friends and me hanging out with them...__ __**But I still have to deal with them every day some times it can be very bad but then it is also good times that we look at**__. Like sometimes we get in fights over dumb things that we say and then we don’t realize that it is something dumb we are worrying about. **__But in the end we end up being cool together an this is a big step in my life that I have to tolerate with them.__** They hang out with me every day but then I still hang out with them and tolerate that. __ When I talk about my family I usually talk about all the good things that come out of it like maybe what they got me and stuff__. But then they don’t really no what I tolerate with every day. Like my sister that annoys me saying the same thing every day to do the dishes when I never agreed to do them an I ONLY DRY! Then again my dad he is always trying to learn the computer an I always tell him he never will cause I need on it cause thats my domain. But I am sure one day in my life I will open to my dad an teach him everything I know about the computer he might be able to get better at it then me NOT! But me tolerating my dad is a big thing but then again there is my sister but I don’t care because I love them and it is worth it. __Then when the day is just beginning and I am going to school I gotta go and deal with the teachers and I hate that__! Teachers I would have to say are the biggest ones that I tolerate because I would not like them but I gotta. One main reason I tolerate them cause they are always pushing for us to turn in our homework and it gets annoying cause I know that I need to turn it in. The last thing is that they sit there and pressure you but then again they don’t ever listen and think they rule the house. That is what I do when I tolerate teachers and why I don’t really like them that much. __In my life tolerance is happening every single day and I think that it is a big step in our lives that we gotta over come.__ My friends that I hang with every day are still good with me and I learn a lot from them and Jakob. My family I see every day and are always there for me and I thank that they are still with me today. The teachers in my school might be annoying at times but I still think they are there for the better in our lives Mrs. Beattie!!! But like I said don’t run away from tolerance it is with you every day of your life and is something you need to overcome.
 * Tolerance**

Your first paragraph has good explaining but needs more detail. Paragraphs two and three only have two details, one more should be added to each. 6. You use sometimes and everyday a lot, and they are missed spelled in a few places. Bold sentences either don't make since of are run-on's.