Shaun+Mears

__Tolerance__ __ Tolerance is an important thing to have when dealing with other people.__ Some of the people that you have to have lots of tolerance for are like your teachers and your par ents. Let’s not forget that sometimes we have tolerate our friends too. __ S ____ ome things t __ __hat really get some and most people going about teachers are when they are gone and they have subs come in.__ When the subs act like they know what they are doing or talking about and the students know that its wrong but like they still make you do it. Another major thing that is also frustrating is when you get in trouble and get embarrassed. Like when ever you are talking during the teacher is talking and like he/she just asked a question and no one raises their hand or answers it and he/she ends up calling on you. Another major one that really gets in the way is getting new assign seat and setting by like the person you __dont__ want to sit by because of whatever reason. Parents are another thing that you have to have tolerance for because like when they change the rules like bed time and they say that they tell you and you swear that you th ey __didnt__ tell you have to learn that not to talk back to much to the point where they get mad and you end up in trouble. Another bug issu e is when they have like a party or so called get together then you have to stay home and watch the kids while they are out and the kids __d__ __ o __ __nt__ listen to you. When your parents make nasty food that doesn’t even look edible and they sit there and make sure you eat it even though y ou are not hungry or its just not good at all. A thing that really get me going and get mad when you are in a different room of the house and your parents want you they yell and yell your name i__ntel__ you come even though you say what like eight times. __ When dealing with friends is sometimes not the easiest thing to do like when try and be funny.__ When they do something funny one time and makes people laug h and then they continue to go on about the kinda stuff that a second grader would laugh at. Also when you get into a fight with them you have to worry about them not being your friend any more and to see who goes around telling everyone that they won and that they did this and that when it never happen. Another thing that really gets me worked up for no reason is when they are beating me at and game that __i__ know __i__ could beat them at and they sit there and talk crap after they beat you when you had a off day or whatever the case may be. So tolerance is important when dealing with all of the things that i have talked about in this essay.

1. Your thesis statement is good and tells what your essay is about. add some more detail to the intro paragraph. 2. In paragraph three try and get a topic sentence because it seems like you just go right into the paragraph. 3. 4. Look out for your spelling especially with capitalizing "I" and the don't 's make sure there is apostrophes. There is a lot of "and" in the sentences, you could shorten some up a little bit. 5. Add some more details to the conclusion to make it more of a paragraph and don't say " what I have talked about in this essay"