Brady+Johnson

__ __I put up with tolerance all the time during sports. When we lose__  __**I put up with that with it**.__ __I put up with kids that mess around in practice.__ __ When kids just don’t care about the team, they are just playing because everyone else is. __Losing is one of the thing that are hard for me to tolerate.__ I hate to get blown out in a game, its hard to put up with it. Losing a game by a few points really bothers me. Losing when we have a big lead really makes me made too. All of the games we lose I still show good tolerance, and tell the team good game.  __The kids who just don’t care about the team.__ They don’t come to practice because they have a lot of home work, they don’t commit to the team. They don’t try hard in the game, they don’t care if they lose, **and thats not the worst part, they don’t even try to win**. All of them wont try hard in practice, I can’t stand them, but I have to put up with them all the time. Every practice I that they go to anyways. Kids that mess around really tick me off too. They never listen to the coach when he is trying to coach, you just want to give them a good jab to the face to shut them up, so you can listen to the coach with out him stopping to wait for them to shut up, or having them interrupt the coach. They wont take anything seriously, in the game, or just trying to watch game film. They always act really hyper before the game, I mean come on really do they have to act like two year olds when the rest of the team is trying to get ready to win a ball game. I have to put up with all of that.     __Tolerance is a big part of sports.__ __If its from losing a big game, to some retard on your team. Its all part of sports, and if your not good with tolerance, then you better be one of the kids who mess around and act like retards.__

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