Alayna+Herman


 * 1) Tolerance

__Have you ever had to tolerate those people that thought that they were better than you?__ Volleyball season was over, everyone was looking forward to the new year of Eight Grade Basketball. During the off season I was at a party and my friend, Amber, told me about a Double Threat team that her mom was making. Amber asked me if I wanted to be on the team with her and a few other people. I said a wasn’t sure when I heard the times of the practices. When I asked my parents about being on the team they said no. __The Double Threat team started up and was a huge deal to the people that were on it.__ Most of my friends were on the team such as Amber, Miranda, Cassi, Livi and Lilah. The only thing they ever talked about was the Double Threat team. Apparently the whole league was as aggressive and violent as two dogs fighting over a cat. I was a little worried that when the schools basketball started up that they would end up hurting someone. I went to my best friend, Jess, and told her how I felt about the situation and she felt the same way. __When the first day of basketball practice came everyone knew that the Double Threat team would get the most playing time.__ Just as we had said they were the ones that got to be the show people for learning drills. It was like the Coach had purposely picked them out. When we came into practice the next day Coach wasn’t there because he had a meeting to go to. Practice without a coach was horrible. The Double Threat team was running the whole show and if you didn’t do a drill right you would get chewed out. __“Starting line up is going to be Amber, Miranda, Cassi, Livi and Lilah.” yelled Coach.__ Alex, Kris, Kati, Jess and I all looked around at each other because we knew before the season had started that the line up was exactly what was just said. We all had been pushed out of playing because we were not part of that stupid team. When we were on the bench with the girls from the Double Threat Team the only thing we heard most of the time was,” Come on you could of got that ball!” “Don’t pass to her she will miss!” “I wish Coach would just put the good team in then we could win this!” They didn’t realize that saying that stuff made the rest of us feel like we couldn't play basketball very well. __I have had to put up with all of the stuff the stuff said since the beginning of the season.__ I haven't said a word to any of them, even though every time they bring up the subject of winning with the better team I want to yell at them. That was true tolerance that I showed. I kept myself tolerant because I know nothing good will come from yelling at them or getting after them. I would like to know of someone that has accomplished that.


 * I like how in the very last paragraph, you have a bunch of different sentence lengths. I also like how you changed the names of people so that you don't have to hurt anyone's feelings.